I finally knuckled down and visited the Oracle (look Kerfe, Jane, and Merril! I AM FINALLY VISITING THE ORACLE!) because I absolutely had no hooks or inspiration whatsoever to start with beyond the first line.
I'm not sure it fits the theme of gifts and joy - well, there's gifts, the joy may be a little less easy to spot, but it was definitely interesting! (which means more visits to the Oracle in future I think...)
ANNIVERSARY, OR, THE LOVE SONG OF
THE SHY GIRL IN APARTMENT Q3
The
moon is a slip of orange smile
in a dark sky - brilliant as cake
Desire’s
a moist pie with perfume
sweet as candy - an open eye of
salt-ferocious need -
champagne fire - a vast universe
of slow
stars
You
are smoke-dazzled fever
cooled only by porcelain-touch
My
broken boy I’d give you worlds -
heaven – hell – the language
of butterfly wings – sea wave
susurration secrets –
the whorls of my fingertips
against your skin
will have to suffice
(Don’t
you know – they contain
my world – in their touch
lies all of me)
5 comments:
So many wonderful phrases!
"salt-ferocious need -
champagne fire - a vast universe
of slow stars"
It sounds like she gave you quite a message!
Thank you Merril! She DID. I had no idea what to do with most of it either! It took some definite playing around - to the point I accidentally swallowed a whole lemon pastille, and I'm still trying to gulp it down right now. I guess that's joy - swallowing it down!
Not sure what the Oracle is, but there is some lovely imagery in this poem. Also love the title.
Barbara, the Oracle is the Magnetic Poetry site, where they have this little section that you can play around with magnetic poetry words like you would on a fridge! It's really good for inspiration as I've found out today.
Thank you so much - it was a hella difficult write, even with the Oracle...
Yay! And look what she gave you!
Touch is so potent as communication...she knows.
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